The charts below show the main reasons for the study among students of different age groups and the amount of support from employers.
The diagrams outline why
students
from different age
groups study
and the support
they get from their employers
.
Overall
, having a promising career
is the main reason young people
study
while
it is a personal interest
for grown-ups. Moreover
, young employees get more support
from their employers
regarding their education
.
According to
the first bar graph, people
under 40 years
old mostly study
for a career
while
people
over 49 years
mainly study
for their interest
. Interestingly for the Fix the agreement mistake
interests
age
group 40 to 49, the number of people
who study
for a career
and the number of people
who study
for interest
is the same. 80% of students
under 26 years
continue their education
to build a career
. Seven out of ten students
over 49 years
old do so for their interest
rather than Fix the agreement mistake
interests
the
Change the word
their
career
.
Graph 2 shows that more than 60% of students
under 26 years
old get support
from their employers
for their education
, supporting their time off, and financial support
. This
percentage reduces with the increase of
Change preposition
in
age
, and at
Change preposition
in
30
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the 30
age
groups, 32% get the employers
' support
. After that, the employers
' support
for their employees' education
increases and reaches 45% for the over 49 year's
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years
age
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, age, study, support, employers, career, people, interest, education, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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