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The plans show the change of a small theater in 2010 and 2012.

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Over the period of 2 years, the area has witnessed big changes especially to the
theater
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 which were redeveloped. It can be seen that the
theater
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 had a
stage
 between the media and auditorium in 2010, compared to the
theater
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 repaired the bigger
stage
, as well as the
hall
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 had been constructed where the media used to be over the
next
 2 years. In the year 2010, to the west of
stage
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 there is storage where was replaced the media in 2012.
In addition
, its area
also
 expanded to add the showers. At that time, the storage has located the east of the
stage
. It is striking that in front of the auditorium had the zone which was constructed
admin
office
 and
ticket
office
 in the left side in the bottom corner.
Moreover
, diagonally opposite the
admin
office
 is the coffee shop where was placed on the right side of the main entrance in the year 2010. In the same zone, the
ticket
 was moved and altered to the cafe area in 2012.
However
, the main entrance had stayed unchanged . The restaurant had been developed in the west of the
ticket
office
 where the
admin
office
 and
ticket
 service laid out before.
Finally
, the
admin
office
 was moved to the above restaurant.
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