In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Deciding which
transport
is better, depends upon the public to public. In my view, both play an important role. My
next
few paragraphs will shape up my position. The
railway
is one of the best
transport
systems for the massive amount of people.
However
, it has some pros and cons. If the authority spends more money on the
railway
, maybe more
train
will come and go from one place to another but the
train
is more suitable for a little bit longer journey rather than a shorter journey. A
train
travelling charges lower cost than any other
transport
system
. But it has a fixed timing when we can use it. If someone does late for few minutes maybe he has to wait for hours to
come
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another rail. The
train
journey is less risk full than any other
therefore
, the government can take the decision to spend more money on constructing new
railway
lines. Some stations don't allow the user to enter without a card. In some ,cases
this
is the smart
system
still it's a hassle for many customers. Existing
transport
conveys some values of that countries or officials. Some public
transport
may be running for more than 100 years, whereas some are
also
traditional. if we build a new kind of
transport
system
then
maybe the older
transport
will be lost their appeal, rather could be done on things, as
this
transport
system
is older,
then
we can improve it for better ,
therefore
, it can keep its value to the public.
on the other
hand
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existing
transport
like buses and other vehicle is easily accessible at any time. if
i
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do late for 10 minutes
then
maybe I've to wait for 20 minutes to get another bus and that's fair. The public can access it by card or cash so no hassle over there. as the existing public
transport
is serving from many years ago,
therefore
, need to improve them for providing better service. In some countries, the population is increasing more and more and
therefore
, building new
railway
line is a kind of
waste
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of land because trains need a particularly different route.
on the other
hand
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it's easy to convey massive people at once from one place to another. Due to older, existing
transport
can occur frequent accident,
although
there has some historic value. At
last
, I can say that
,
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both views can be applicable. There are definite pros and cons for both views from
the
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country to country.
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