Some people believe that parents should limit their children hours of watching tv and playing computer games, but encourage to read books. Do you agree or disagree

Parentage restrictions play a vital role in every child's life. Is it beneficial to restrict them
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early age? There are those who
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that it is fruitful to
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kids life to restraint from watching TV and playing video games.
However
, opponents disagree with
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statement and opine that they should find
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as reading
book
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and
also
motivate them to read
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regularly.
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essay will discuss which are
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activity is better for them? In
this
modern era , parents are more
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about
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toddlers daily routine work and set up
limit
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for them.
For example
, study time , playing video , watching small screen etc. but it has some consequences young children become more aggressive and stubborn
As a result
they will not concentrate
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studies. Nowadays, there are other alternative available
such
as reading inspiration
story book
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which is specifically made for little ones.
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nurtures should motivate them for it
instead
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much time on
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less
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things.
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, it will help them to
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knowledge
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language, vocabulary , reading, etc.
Moreover
, reading
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kind of storytelling books help them to learn about other countries traditions and culture and
also
encourage them to explore new places .they will become
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responsible and knowledgeable person. In conclusion,
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watching TV and playing stations are
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of entertainment for young children, but restricted by their nurtures make them stubborn. So , In my point of
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their guardians should motivate them since
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childhood so that they will learn the importance of reading books in
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Their
life.
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