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In many families today, both parents work. Are there more advantages when a mother works than disadvantages?

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Mothers play a vital role to raise their small children. And other family members. These days, most females leave their job due to concerns about their nuclear family. There are those who claim that
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 who are not working should pay by the authority.
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, other opponents disagree with the above statement and opine that it is a Negative impact on other working persons doing
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 in offices.
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 essay will discuss whether
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 pay them or not. On the one hand. It is advantageous for individuals. If
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 pay them without doing any
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 . Their families will strong financial and they will full- fill Their all requirements to them
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 as better education, healthy meal, costly gadgets etc.
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, individuals who live with them live
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great life.
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, I m disagree with that pay them wages, since they are unemployed. It's not a fruitful decision by the authorities and has some consequences.
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 it directly impacts those
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's who are working.because they are receiving salaries after doing hard
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.it can be not good for the economical condition.
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, a study shows that 40 per cent to 50 per cent of
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 resign From Their company .
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,the workforce will reduce and public capital
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 not utilized in public services.
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, the
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 should spend money to provide essential things.because they have limited funds In the conclusion, A mother who are not working and spend her time with the little one and another person.
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, paid them is not a solution it will create many problems between the
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 and people. In my point of ,view citizens should manage all things together so that
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's do
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 with them and earn it.
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