The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centres. It is feared that this could have a negative influence on the young and society. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view?
There are some concerns about the amount of
time
that young people
spend in shopping centres. Some people
believe this
has a negative effect on the youngsters as well on society
. This
viewpoint will be discussed in the following essay as in fact, I fully agree with it.
Firstly
, in today's modern world parents spoil their children constantly. They buy their kids expensive gifts and allow them to do everything they want. However
, this
approach influences young people
negatively. In this
way, they start to think of themselves as unattainable. For instance
, if a person has rich parents they believe that they can go to university without studying because their mother and father will pay for it. These young people
do not want to take responsibility for their actions. They prefer to spend their leisure time
in shopping centres, which is not a bad decision if the time
is controlled, instead
of, for example
, in the library where they can study so that they can have a chance for a prospective future career. In view of this
fact, spending their free time
shopping for clothes or going to the movies just so they can spend the money received from their rich parents, is not helpful to young people
and their future. Additionally
, this
affects the whole society
, because it needs educated people
rather than some spoiled kids that can not take care of themselves without their parent's money.
In conclusion, I wholeheartedly believe youths today do not spend their time
in a qualitative manner. Instead
of studying, working or doing some volunteer work in order to help society
grow and earn some additional revenue, they spend their free time
pointlessly. In my opinion, this
kind of attitude and approach are not helpful neither for the youngsters nor for society
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