Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (Such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who ony think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Children
choices should mostly depend on the
parent
's command. In my opinion, in some
cases
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I agree with the
first
statement but we can'
t
ignore the
second
one. My
next
few paragraphs will shape up my position.
An infant
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should have the freedom for their
well
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growth. They have their own choices, own
decision
. We can'
t
force them to
take
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a
decision
.
However
, no
parent
knows exactly what is
the
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best for his
children
. So, we should give them enough space to make them stable from
the
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every sector on their own. In some cases, if we force them to play with somethings particularly that may be they didn'
t
like that and
therefore
, their brain or thinking could be affected whereas we will never understand because they can'
t
share properly anything because of their age group. They can just enjoy with their preferences.
For example
, A child like to play Football with his friends or neighbour whereas no matters is he a great player or not but he enjoys. In that case, if a
parent
deprived him of that
then
, maybe he will sit down in a corner of his room and will think about it or something else and
as a result
that will be a threat for his growing up. In general, parents can guide them and teach them about right or wrong in a friendly manner.
Then
they will understand properly
about
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it. Good parents should be
a
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good friends with their
children
. As they are
child
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so, they are not enough aged to take all the
decision
. By mistakes, they can take any wrong
decision
and that can impact in the future. In that case, If
a
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parents behave like a friend with them rather than parental attitude they might ask them about anything before taking any
decision
. As a
parent
nurturing the
children
, their main focus should be
taken
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care of them properly.
Otherwise
, they can choose the wrong path that will affect them in the long run.
For example
, If a child chooses gambling as a game from their childhood, or many
children
getting addicted to the drug due to
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of proper guideline from their family. In that case, family and friends could be the only way to recover them. To wrap up my views and opinion, in Some cases we should give them liberty but we shouldn'
t
ignore them or force them for something.
On the other hand
,
children
also
need genuine guideline and teaching to be a perfect man in the future that can restrict them from taking a wrong
decision
that can affect them in the long run.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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