Government in many countries have recently introduce special taxes on food and beverages which is highly of sugar . some think that this taxes are good idea , but other are disagree on this view .

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Sugar is essential parts of our daily routine
diet
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it should be consumed in nominal amount because of detrimental effects on
health
. In some ,Nation extra charges are imposed on highly contain glucose product
such
as beverage and chocolates to reduce consumption, which is not agreed upon by one part of the society.
However
, the regulatory authority should keep all the factors related to public
health
in his mind, and organize an awareness program of a healthy
diet
and high tariff consequences on civilization.
To begin
with, healthy
diet
awareness camp, youngsters are easily distracting towards energy drinks, which are result in obesity and hypertension.
Moreover
, they regularly consuming
such
nutrition due to a lack of knowledge. Owing to
this
, local authority organizes knowledge expending program in school and college to change the mindset.
Furthermore
, study subjects of vigorous
diet
should be part of primary and high education syllabus to enlarge proficiency.
In addition
, with the development of society not only fitness level will improve but
also
nation economy will strong.
On the other hand
, including toll on regular food items would have a negative impact on the community. Hike on price would seriously impact for among and individual.
For example
, in ,India most of the family have a limited source of income,
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is fulfilling
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requirement. He will not able to do fulfil the daily bread requirement of his family.
In addition
, the manufacturing company will
also
lose their business due to lack of consumption, and people will
also
lose their job in a private company. It has
also
a detrimental impact on the country economy. In conclusion, council power has responsibilities to take the
health
of peoples by taking several steps like skill enhancement programs and by education system improvement.
However
, an individual
also
the equal responsibilities for their
health
by proper food routine chart follow-up. charging extra toll is not the right solution in order to a healthy society.
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