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It is more important to have a good family than to have friends. Family can always compensate for the absence of friendship. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#friends #absence #friendship
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Indubitably, the family provides support even when
friends
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 are not close;
however
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, do they play a more significant role in
one
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’s life than
friends
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? I find it to be true because family provides better advice and a more comfortable environment to be with than
friends
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besides
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 their unconditional love.
One
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 can get better suggestions for his future from his family members.
This
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 is because parents in
one
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’s family are more experienced than
his
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their
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friends
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, who are mostly of the same age.
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, by following his parents’ advice, there are fewer chances of committing mistakes in life than listening to what a person’s
friends
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 say.
For instance
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,
one
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 of my
friends
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 is
successful
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a successful
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businessmen
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businessman
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 because of his elder
brother
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brother's
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 guidance.
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 helping in making the right decisions, the family is easier to adjust
with
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to
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. The reason for
it
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this
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 is that
one
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is
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has been
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 with his family representative since childhood, which makes it easier to understand each other’s nature and adjust
accordingly
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,
whereas
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, in the case of acquaintance,
one
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 needs to make extra efforts and change his behaviour to maintain a strong bond. Most importantly, the family loves selflessly. Since the bond between family members is natural, but the same is made after thinking about
one
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’s benefits in the case of a companion,
one
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 may expect support from the representative of his family even when he cannot return the favour. Had my friend’s father, for instance, thought of the return on investment, he would never have looked after his son’s expenses
while
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 allowing him to do
volunteering
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 work for two years. In conclusion, owing to the beneficial advice, relaxed environment and unselfish love
one
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 gets from his family, I am convinced that the role of the family is bigger than that of
friends
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 in every person’s life.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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