At the present time , the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults , compared with the number of older people . Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages ?

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In recent time, many nations have young citizens huge numbers as compared to

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crucial role in society. Older

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are more intelligent in

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compare to the young

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adults

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. They have great experience of their work field and

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becomes beneficial for employees who

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under them.

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stock market trader Rakesh Junjunval is

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70 years old and he has achieved very great opportunities in

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market and

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1st position in investment. With the help of his share market session and experience number of

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becoming intelligent in

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bazaar. On other hand, there are several advantages. The

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and major benefit is,

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are role model of their nation. They have more ability to archive targets as compare to older

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able to do physical activity faster than

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. These days in all sectors, authorities

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people

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whose age is between 18-35 because they have more ability to represent their knowledge and

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they learn new things faster and

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marketing

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and airlines sector gives

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preference to young

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because in these fields hard work is common and they have

ability

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to do it.

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, young

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are more adaptive. They can make their country different from other nations. Younger

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can adapt knowledge faster than older

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they are trying for new inventions which

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on country’s economy in

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way. To exemplify,

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boy in India made a car which

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water as

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fuel so, it can be

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project for India due to it they can reduce the usage of petrol and diesel. In conclusion, not only younger

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but older

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important for the nation but the young

generation

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is more beneficial for all the countries in several ways.

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At the present time , the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults , compared with the number of older people . Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages ?

some people think that it is good for a country’s culture to import foreign movies and TV programmes. Others think that it is better to produce these locally. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Today every large city facing traffic jam problem. what are the causes and how can it tackle

In today's very competitive world, a worker has to possess multiple skills to succeed. Among the skills that a worker should possess, which skill do you think is more important, social skills or good qualifications? Explain the reasons and provide specific examples to support your answer.

Some employers believe that job applicants’ social skills are more important than their academic qualifications. To what extent do you agree or disagree?