At the present time , the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults , compared with the number of older people . Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages ?

In recent time, many nations have young citizens huge numbers as compared to
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older
one
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.I believe that the advantages
are outweigh
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the disadvantages. My position is argued
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. On one hand, older
people
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an
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crucial role in society. Older
people
are more intelligent in
field
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compare to the young
generation
also
some are
idol
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of
adults
. They have great experience of their work field and
its
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becomes beneficial for employees who
works
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under them.
For instance
,
indian
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Indian
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stock market trader Rakesh Junjunval is
a
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best example of it. He is
a
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70 years old and he has achieved very great opportunities in
stock
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market and
currently
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he is
on
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1st position in investment. With the help of his share market session and experience number of
adults
becoming intelligent in
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bazaar. On other hand, there are several advantages. The
first
and major benefit is,
adults
are role model of their nation. They have more ability to archive targets as compare to older
people
.
Young
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generation
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also
able to do physical activity faster than
old
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the old
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generation
. These days in all sectors, authorities
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people
whose age is between 18-35 because they have more ability to represent their knowledge and
also
they learn new things faster and
easily
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.
For example
,
marketing
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and airlines sector gives
first
preference to young
people
because in these fields hard work is common and they have
ability
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to do it.
Moreover
, young
adults
are more adaptive. They can make their country different from other nations. Younger
adults
can adapt knowledge faster than older
one
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also
they are trying for new inventions which
affects
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on country’s economy in
positive
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way. To exemplify,
last
year,
26 year old
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boy in India made a car which
use
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water as
a
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fuel so, it can be
beneficial
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project for India due to it they can reduce the usage of petrol and diesel. In conclusion, not only younger
people
but older
people
also
important for the nation but the young
generation
is more beneficial for all the countries in several ways.
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