Choose a person in your extended family who is your idol. Write his or her biography. Include how he or she has inspired you.

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Most of the people may have an idol or who’s inspired them to do something ,but if we talk about a
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in our family we will have one
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that makes us proud of him or she and
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do something like them because they may
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us to do something like them. If we talk about the
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in our family that inspired us or we should he or she to be our idol,
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in my family that makes me
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be like her
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my mom, she is the
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that I have expected her. She is a
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that very strong of her mind because when she does something
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her but
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stop doing it she still tries to do
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thing until she finished.
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my mom makes me
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be like her because she makes me to strong and makes me
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myself like her,
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when I have something
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me I will try until it has done like now that I have tried to do
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very hard to me because my grammar is very bad but I still try to do it until I’m successful.
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someone in our family that makes us
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be good like he or she because if we have someone that
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us, it can make us
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with the thing that we want to do like our idol.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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