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YOU ARE LIVING IN UNIVERSITY RESIDENCE AND YOU HAVE PROBLEM WITH HIGH LEVEL OF

#university #residence #level
Dear sir, I am writing
this
 letter to bring to your notice the extreme level of disturbance caused by
new
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 restaurant opened locally. Let me explain the situation, the new eatery is located beside the student house. It has
musical
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 theme
therefore
, they play music till late
night
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at night
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. They have live concerts as well more often due to which they turn the volume high. As of
exagerated
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exaggerated
noise
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 not only me but other students as well are not able to concentrate on their studies and are getting
hard
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 time completing our assignments.
In addition
 to
this
,
last
 week I had my test for which I did not get a chance to study
Therefore
, I scored a lower grade. Final term exams are starting from
next
 week and I am afraid that if
this
 goes like same It might affect my academic report.
Lastly
, My suggestion would be to either make
this
 restaurant
noise free
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 after 10pm or change the operating hours
accordingly
 . I thank you for your consideration. Yours sincerely, Kaur
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