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Schools should not force children to learn a foreign language. Agree or disagree

#schools #force #children #language
Nowadays a lot of students take a
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 after graduating from school, and I think it kind of became a new trend. In my personal opinion, it is a really good chance to gain work experience, new skills and take a little rest before starting
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, difficult and interesting chapter in your life. I have no experience at the time, but I heard a lot of stories and discussions on that topic and there were good, and bad ones as well. Bad ones are usually connected with people with no motivation to do something
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 or people who have no self-control and can just waste time or realize that they don’t want to continue studying
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 because they found
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 job with quick earnings and they are ready to leave everything they have done before in the past. I definitely think that good time management and planning your whole year will help you to make
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, the reasons why, and of course it depends on you. It is always a good idea to prepare yourself, to follow the heart and gain more experience.
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