If a product is good and meet customer needs,then people will buy it. So advertising it is unneccessary. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

In the modern world, We will find plenty of products for a need. Indeed, if anyone finds a thing useful or satisfy his or her needs

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they will buy that. Of ,course the promotion of the merchandise shows its qualities but it

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creates confusion in selection and over-expectation. In

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article not required. The advertising industry not only creates over expectation in the customers but

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confuse them with the right selection. Promotion generates false dreams and hopes in customers.

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FairNlovely cream’s commercial

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shows, it will fair the scene in just seven days. So people buy

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cream with the expectation that they will be fair after applying

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promotes racism that black girl is not beautiful and fairness is the scale of beauty. Along with

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as we can see so many advertisements from a different brand for a single commodity make user confused that which one is best to suits their requirement. That’s why I really think there should be a limit on displaying endorsement. Certainly, the Media industry spending so much money to fool their customers as most of the products are not actually meant to work, they are only for playing with customer’s emotions.

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after applying

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shampoo a bald man get the hair in just fifteen days,

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. Because hair growth majorly depends on an individual's genetics and harmons.In

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,case it not only impact a person’s emotions but the brand name is

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in the future customer never buy any merchandise from that brand. On , other hands if a customer buys after finding it useful he will be happier. In conclusion, the Advertisement of the product should be controlled. As it is responsible for lots of false information.

manasvimahant

May 27, 2021

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