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Band 8.5

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Adam, It’s been a long
time
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 since we caught up. I came to know that you are planning to go for summer camping which is a great idea. From past experience, I can say you will relentlessly enjoy summer camp. You can go for a walk in the wild forest to enjoy its beauty,
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, swimming and going fishing would be captivating as well.
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, you might face some challenges as well
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 as some poor weather conditions, dangerous animals and poisonous plants in the forest.
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, you will probably need to share the bathroom with the public,
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, make the proper arrangements for your personal hygiene. I was thrilled that I would join you
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time
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, unfortunately, my parents are coming to visit me after a long
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.
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, I want to spend some quality
time
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 with them. Please accept my apologies for not joining you
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. I hope you will enjoy your camp and I am hoping to meet you soon. Yours faithfully, Navneet Kaur.

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task achievement
Try to elaborate a bit more on the potential disadvantages your friend might face during the camping trip. Adding specific examples or more detailed explanations can improve your task achievement.
coherence cohesion
Consider using clearer topic sentences to introduce each paragraph's main idea. This will help guide the reader through your letter more effectively.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are very well done, creating a friendly and personal tone suitable for a letter to a friend.
task achievement
Your writing tone is appropriate and friendly, making it suitable for the context of advising a friend.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • serenity
  • outdoors
  • refreshing
  • hustle and bustle
  • inherent
  • foster
  • distractions
  • cost-effective
  • unpredictable
  • wildlife
  • adequate preparation
  • physical demands
  • researching
  • campsite
  • lasting memories
  • mutual interests
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