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The rate of cybercrime is increased day by day in the world. what are the reasons and what can be done to tackle this issue?

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In today's world, with the development of
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modern technology, the number of crimes committed in networks has increased. In
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 will describe what causes
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 give some solutions. One of the main reasons is that people do not use proper protection for security.
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, their safety depends on themselves,
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, they do not pay attention to
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digital work , so it will be easier for hackers to control someone's private
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. Another leading factor to consider is that there is an
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increase
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 to turn to crime in different applications. To be more specific,
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 technology is nowadays flawless, there are still some unsolved issues for cybercrime.
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,
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 hacker from Oxford and a member of the lapsus$ hacking group
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 90 early videos of progress version GTA 6 which belongs to
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 game company called Rockstar Games. With regard to solutions
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 problem, the community,
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especially
 adults, should be more careful
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the social platforms they spend most of
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 in.
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 not joining inappropriate
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 and
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 platforms, cybercrime can be prevented.
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, governments can
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raise
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 problem and introduce some training programmes for
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society to preserve their properties.
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, in Denmark, people are informed and encouraged
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 to deal with these criminals, by involving in some IT classes
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experts. In conclusion, taking all the above-mentioned points into account,
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 there are plenty of methods for cybercrimes, it is not impossible to stop. Implementing new various ways to overcome
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 issue and being more responsible can lead to
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 crimes
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 the internet

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grammar
Ensure all sentences are fully complete and correctly punctuated. For instance, 'i' should be capitalized to 'I'.
spelling
Be careful with spelling mistakes, like 'icrease' instead of 'increase' and 'espicially' instead of 'especially'. Proofreading can help catch these errors.
clarity
Enhance the clarity of your ideas by providing more context or explanation. This way, your main points can be understood more comprehensively.
style
Consider using varied sentence structures to improve the flow of your writing and keep the reader engaged.
content
The essay presents a clear understanding of the topic and makes relevant points regarding the causes and solutions of cybercrime.
examples
The examples provided, such as the case of the GTA 6 leak, show an effort to support claims with real-world situations.

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