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Although the prices of fuels have greatly increased over the last decade or two, it is argued that further increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce world consumption of fuel and lessen pressure on the world’s fuel resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree whit this statement.

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Fuel
 prices have been increasing in the past 20 years. These days
people
 discussing that the best way to reduce world usage of
fuel
 and hit the
fuel
 resources
are
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 by increasing
fuel
cost
.
This
 essay will argue why increasing
fuel
cost
ia
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is
 extremely important. Many
people
 complaining
from
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about
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 the raising in the
fuel
cost
. I think the reason they are complaining is that the
price
are
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 already
than
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then
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 it was 10 years ago,
People
 who own cars are the most affected
financilly
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financially
.
For example
, the total
cost
 of filling out Rang Rover car was 100 riyals 10 years ago and
noe
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now
 it reached 300 riyals
that is
 triple the total
cost
. Because of
that
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 they are refusing the idea of increasing.
However
,
although
fuel
price
 is financially affecting
people
, it has many advantages and it can completely
justified
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be justified
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. Individual must decrease
using
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use
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 of
fuel
 in order to help the environment.
People
 must start using public transport and private cars as a transporter to help reducing traffic. Indeed,
last
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 researches indicate raising in air pollution and
increase
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an increase
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of
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in
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 respiratory disease in India. Another research shows that the reason
of
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for
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 that huge amount of traffic in Egypt is that the rate of
people
 using their car
instead
 of public transport. Overall,
i
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I
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 agree with the idea of
increase
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increasing
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fuel
price
 since it will help us save our planet and reduce traffic problems. To sum up,
this
 essay argued why
people
 should agree with rising
fuel
price
. In my opinion, the benefits
people
 will get from that are more than the risks that's why
i
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 totally agree with it.
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