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Many believe that living in a city offers greater benefits compared to life in the countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#city #life #countryside
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Nowadays, world populations are increasingly moving from rural to urban
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Majority
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 of
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 think that living in the metropolitan
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 are better than life in the villages. I completely agree with the above notion as there are various reasons for it.
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 essay will discuss my viewpoint and relevant examples. There are numerous reasons behind
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 migration.
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 can get a better education by living in the vast
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. Since all the major colleges or universities are located in these
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,
majority
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the majority
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 of students can get higher education.
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wide
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 range of hospitals and medical facilities are helping
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 better health.
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, a few sick
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 are interested to stay in the towns. These facilities are made
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to
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apply
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migrate from
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underdeveloped
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under developed
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underdeveloped
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places
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 to developed
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. To illustrate, a survey conducted on
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 relocation, 60% of the younger generation moving to the
cities
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 for quality education and medical amenities.
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public
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 in the
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are
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 increasing rapidly.
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, employment is a big issue in rural
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 because there would be
a not sufficient job opportunities
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not sufficient job opportunities
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 for educated
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. Owing to
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, highly qualified
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 interested to move to big
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 for jobs. Because most of the
top rated
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top-rated
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Multi national
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Multinational
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 companies are established in these
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, so masses can gain good employment and can earn high wages compared to villages. To exemplify, an article published by the Times newspaper on job requirements in the
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, majority of youth going for jobs.
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, these opportunities make
people
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to
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migrate
urban
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to urban
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areas
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. In conclusion, the above discussion makes it evident that there are many reasons to support the view that
people
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migration
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 to
cities
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 for
quality
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a quality
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 lifestyle and better jobs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • metropolitan
  • infrastructure
  • cosmopolitan
  • commute
  • sociocultural
  • prosperity
  • sustainability
  • rural
  • tranquility
  • urbanization
  • relocation
  • residential
  • populace
  • ecological footprint
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