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Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century, and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions.

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One of the largest threats faced by humans in
this
 century is Global warming which causes a dramatic increase in
sea
 levels.
As a result
, new issues arise including flooding of houses and land loss but these issues can be tackled by building flood barriers and reducing
air
pollution
. One of the major issue faced by humans due to increasing
sea
 levels is house flooding which causes destruction on a very huge
level
. People who used to live
on
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 coastal areas become the victims of flooding every year. Even, if the ocean
level
 rises few inches their houses overflow with
water
. Another issue produced by increasing
sea
level
is land
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island
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 loss which is caused due to the higher
pollution
 in the
air
. There are multiple islands like Hawai and Santorini
are
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 going
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underwater
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under
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water
 just because of
this
. Even, Surface area of few countries including the Maldives and Indonesia decreasing day by day. One effective solution to overcome the flooding to protect coastal area is by building flood barriers and
water
 reservoirs. By storing the
water
 and diverting the overflow government can protect many people living on the edge of
ocean
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. While
on the other hand
 islands can be protected by decreasing the
air
pollution
level
. Reduction of
air
pollution
 can be done by planting trees and building forests.
However
, building reservoirs
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 financially demanding can only be implemented on the government
level
where as
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 every human being can plant a tree on the individual
level
. Pakistan is among the top countries
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affected
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effected
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 by climate change due to
this
 Government took
an
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 initiative to plant a billion tree to overcome
this
 disaster. In conclusion, flooding and land loss are the major issues caused by rising
sea
 levels but can be taken care of by building flood barriers and increasing greenery
level
.
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