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Some people believe that all wild animals should be protected. Others say that few wild animals should be protected instead. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Wildlife
 protection has become one of the main concerns of many countries. Meanwhile, whether all
animals
 should be preserved, or only some of them, has sparked much debate. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both arguments and explain my support of the former view. The significance of biodiversity is apparent,
however
 more and more representatives of flora and fauna are getting extinct in the present age,
therefore
 human being is responsible
to protect
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wildlife
. All the creatures are an essential part of the ecosystem. First of all,
extinction
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 of any habitat will affect the food chain and living conditions of other species.
For instance
, if all tigers stop existing, it will disrupt the balance of the ecosystem,
consequently
, other species may be endangered,
while
 others may be overpopulated.
Additionally
, every year scientists invent new medicine by studying
animals
.
Lastly
, human
being's
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beings'
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 actions can adversely affect
wildlife
,
therefore
 people should take all
the
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responsibility for their actions. More specifically, thousands of acres of destroyed forests were home to the local habitats, which may be endangered now. Alternatively,
preservation
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 of all the
animals
 may require the allocation of considerable funds, which would not be rational considering that some people are still living in poverty.
Nevertheless
, governments are spending a lot of money on
such
 projects as space explorations, these funds should be spent on preserving
wildlife
, education and healthcare. In conclusion, I would agree that the preservation of all
the
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endangered
wildlife
 may have some drawbacks. Despite that, I am convinced that every life form is important,
all
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animals
 should be protected.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the introduction provides a clear thesis statement and outlines the main points to be discussed in the essay. Also, make sure the conclusion restates the thesis and summarizes the main points.
task achievement
You have provided a clear and complete response to the prompt by discussing both views and expressing your opinion. However, ensure that you address the arguments in more depth and use specific examples to support your points.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • conservation status
  • ecological significance
  • holistic approach
  • endangered species
  • natural heritage
  • unforeseen negative impacts
  • economically non-viable
  • prioritization
  • ecosystem balance
  • conservation efforts
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