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Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no special knowledge of the following topic: News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported? Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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In
this
 contemporary era, it is irrefutable that
contents
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 of
media
is
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are
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 a
brurning
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burning
 topic of discussion. These days,
broadcasting
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the broadcasting
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 and printing of
news
 are decided by
news
 editors. The upcoming
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paragraphs
 will shed a light on factors influencing these choices.
Also
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 I will explain the addiction to bad
news
 and the possibilities of reporting more good
news
. To commence with, the most pivotal factor is that
the
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wealthy
people
 can easily alter the reality of
news
 before it would print for the public.
In addition
, they can take help from criminals to influence the owners of
media
.
For instance
, a survey recently conducted by BBC
News
 has revealed that 40% of the contents printed in the papers was not
genuine
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last
 year.
Moreover
,
news
 editors
also
 influenced by their friends and relatives.
However
,
people
 are
also
 addicted to foul
news
 nowadays.
Also
, some folks take interest in these types of altered stories of
media
. Though it is
responsibility
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 of editors to present the actual content to the societies, citizens are equally responsible to do not entertain false
news
.
Furthermore
, the government should monitor
news
 channels that are broadcasting bad
news
.
For example
, surveillance of The British Government over
media
 brought a positive change
last
 year in the United Kingdom.
Besides
, many
people
 still love to hear and watch correct information. In conclusion,
the
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rich
people
 and criminals affect the outcomes of
media
. Though some of the masses are inclined towards
the
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fake
news
 which
are
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is
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 the source of entertainments for them, many
people
 are still interested to know the reality.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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