You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. You should write at least 250 words.

It cannot be denied that in the present
times
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money is the most important asset for everyone in
this
world. It is indeed becoming smart to choose more than one career for oneself considering how the trends are changing fast. A lot of
people
have started building multiple careers for
themsleves
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themselves
already. Possible reasons for
this
have been discussed
further
. To start with, it is very crucial these days to have an ongoing source of money that will never perish. Considering how fast the industries change in their requirements, mastering or clinging to one career may be very detrimental in a negative way.
For example
, when I was a small kid my father was a builder. He was involved in construction heavily,
however
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when I grew up I saw my father had switched to supply of building materials (sand, greet, bricks and other
such
materials). I realized only recently that my father was
also
carrying construction and building
business
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on the side by partnering with other
people
.
This
evidently shows how a
person
has to adapt
with
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the change and stay
upto
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up to
the mark.
Moreover
,
people
with more than one area of expertise are sought by businesses and industries as they have to employ
less
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people
for different kinds of work. To illustrate, a
person
is an IT professional and he has
also
done a certified course in accountancy, it would be beneficial for a company to hire that
person
for both kinds of work and
also
for the
person
as he will be recognised different from the crowd and paid
accordingly
.
In addition
to that, a lot of times
people
have to choose a career just because it has more money rather
then
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choosing what they like.
For instance
,
initially
in India writers, painters and
such
people
were not recognised and not paid much so families often used to force their young ones to opt for engineering or medicine. But now the scenario has changed, so a
well established
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doctor can
also
maintain a blog of stories or
peoms
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poems
for his or her personal comfort.
This
would
also
enhance a
person
's working abilities as he or she gets to do
do
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what they want as well as work for their
familiy's
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family's
needs. In the light of
above
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the above
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discussion, it is evident that in future it will be a trendsetter to have multiple careers and behold multiple educational qualifications as
this
will enhance personal and professional value in
the
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society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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