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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #climate #change
Nowadays the
climate
change
 is a serious and realistic threat to the
live
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the
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humanity is used to.
However
, some say that excepting
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climate
change
 and living with it is the way to go. I partly agree that we need to learn to live with it, despite it is extremely important
also
 to stop
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climate
change
.
Firstly
,
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climate
change
 is a force of nature, which happened a few times in the history of the earth;
besides
, it has made the world as we know it.
However
, the
last
 global warming started a few decades ago and is still going on.
Therefore
, some think that it is no longer possible to avert the catastrophe,
thus
 all resources must be channelled into developing methods and options to handle the current situation and that we have
finally
 to live with it –
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humanity must
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adapt
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adopt
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 to
this
 condition.
On the other hand
,
adverting
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averting
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climate
change
, to be more specific,
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global warming must be our highest aim to ensure the
live
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 we know it.
Although
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climate
change
 started a few decades ago, there is still a chance to stop it by developing laws and signing global contracts for reducing the carbon footprint of every single country on earth.
However
,
this
 can be done by producing green energy, developing new environmentally friendly technology (especially in the transport sector – bus, trucks,
airplanes
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, cars) or even planting more trees.
In addition
, even every single person can contribute to saving the planet by simply using their bike
instead
 of going by car. In conclusion,
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climate
change
 has already started and is ongoing and
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humanity must
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adapt
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adopt
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adapt
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 to the new circumstances,
however
, there is still a chance to prevent
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global warming and to preserve the world as we know it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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