some people believe that technology has man-made more social do you agree or disagree

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The modern
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has witnessed remarkable progress in the field of technology. In the current
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there are
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innumerous
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way
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people
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. but few
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thinks it
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human beings more
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intractable
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othes
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other
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. I completely disagree with the statement on
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behalf of several reasons that
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will discuss in the following paragraphs.
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, Innovation
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provides us
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opportunities to connect
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world virtually but
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with the
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around us
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because
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today
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today's
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trend,
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young people
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spend most
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on Social media to increase likes and followers. They do not care about what is happening in their surroundings. A recent study
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that billions of a nation have joined social media
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and spend most of
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time
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clicking
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, making videos, watching movies and many more things.
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do not know who is residing
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next door of their living.
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spend most of
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at home,they prefer to do work from home because of
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to socialize with their
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over the phone or
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over conferences.
due to
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cannot able to trust
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easily.
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the incresing
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incresing
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increasing
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also
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people
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life
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in danger. Through fake
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hackers convince
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to share their personal information after that they misuse it. In conclusion, advancement in technology makes our
life
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better,but it fails to make
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more
socialable
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sociable
. The government and authorities should
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a program that
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interactable
life
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