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4. Some people believe that good teamwork is what makes companies successful. Others feel that it is more important to have a good leader. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In today's world of globalisation, many people tend to think that
magnificient
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magnificent
 group work leads to
make
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 organisations successful. While others tend to claim that a person with excellent leadership
skills
 can keep
company
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the company
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in
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on
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 a top winning list.
This
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give
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 a clear
exlanation
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explanation
 on both
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 of views with strong examples and
also
 tell my opinion in a clear statement.
Firstly
, everyone
company
 wish to have
a
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good teamwork. So, some people argue that team members are the main core part to run a
company
 on
successful
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 road path.
Becuase
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Because
 single
invidual
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individual
 cannot handle
company
 projects in
a good manners
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a good manner
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 and it is quite impossible as it results in failure.
Therefore
, good team members with excellent language
skills
, mutual understanding among colleagues, time
mangement
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management
, hardworking nature these all
leads
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lead
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 the
company
 in a successful manner.
Foe
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 example, the Google
company
 in India will be in
top
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 listed for successful projects every year as they have good teamwork management and dedicated workers.
Secondly
, opposition parties try to state that leader plays a key role
for
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in
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 making
company
 future brightful. Not only that, by applying talent
skills
 on teammates and making them assure that they are in good hands.
Moreover
, by show
comfortability
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 among the workers politely make them understand the criteria with rules and regulations can
also
 make
company
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the company
a company
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 successful in all aspects.
For instance
, In TIMES OF INDIA article stated that in
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Singapore
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Multi national
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 companies are in high grade due to the good leadership
skills
 and maintaining all projects quite well with their fellow workers. In conclusion,
every one
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 has their own way of thinking with merits and demerits.
Thus
, I want to explain that a
company
 can go quite well and successful only through good teamwork
skills
 under
good
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 understanding leader.
Hence
,
teammembers
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team members
 spirit must be enthusiastic all the time at work.
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  • Collaboration
  • Synergy
  • Cohesion
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Delegation
  • Autonomy
  • Innovation
  • Morale
  • Strategic planning
  • Charisma
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