4. Some people believe that good teamwork is what makes companies successful. Others feel that it is more important to have a good leader. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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organisations successful. While others tend to claim that a person with excellent leadership
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of views with strong examples and
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, everyone
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good teamwork. So, some people argue that team members are the main core part to run a
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road path.
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cannot handle
company
projects in
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and it is quite impossible as it results in failure.
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, good team members with excellent language
skills
, mutual understanding among colleagues, time
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management

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, hardworking nature these all
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the
company
in a successful manner.
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example, the Google
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in India will be in
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listed for successful projects every year as they have good teamwork management and dedicated workers.
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, opposition parties try to state that leader plays a key role
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making
company
future brightful. Not only that, by applying talent
skills
on teammates and making them assure that they are in good hands.
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, by show
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among the workers politely make them understand the criteria with rules and regulations can
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make
company
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the company
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successful in all aspects.
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Multi national
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companies are in high grade due to the good leadership
skills
and maintaining all projects quite well with their fellow workers. In conclusion,
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has their own way of thinking with merits and demerits.
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, I want to explain that a
company
can go quite well and successful only through good teamwork
skills
under
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understanding leader.
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,
teammembers
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team members

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