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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the contemporary world,
Children
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's development is most crucial. Even we teach them in a home or send them to the
school
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. Both having a different approach to teach a
child
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. I would like to discuss my opinion in the below paragraphs.
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, Both are important in a
child
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's development. In a home, We can teach them our cultures and traditions.
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, How to respect others and talk to them. Well,
Parents
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 are the initial teachers for every
child
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 when he/she is born.
Parents
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 are starting from the beginning and helping him to find and recognize new things.
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,
Parents
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 teach him basic things like how to respect
him
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his
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elders
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,
vtouch
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touch
 the feet and worship.Why worship is important, why we are going to
temple
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the temple
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?. How we can manage other stuff? If we are going out
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 to whom need to follow.
Parents
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 always care about the
children
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.
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,
School
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also
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 playing an important role in
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every
child
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's life.
School
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 is building a base to educate the
child
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. Apart from
this
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, Teach them about as per their knowledge
level
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. How to read, write and speak like talk to our age group students, Follow the discipline, Respect teacher and friends,
Learn
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learn
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 about different subjects. Develop
the
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apply
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physical and
mentally
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mental
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 growth.
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, When a
child
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start
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starts
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 schooling. He will learn a lot about the subjects
those
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that
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 are important to know,Personal growth, Increasing understanding
level
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, Take a proper discussion.
In
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In-School
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School
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 having multiple activities in that
children
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 can participate and increase their confidence
level
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. In conclusion, I would like to say both home and schooling are important for
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child's
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a child's
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 development.
Every one
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Everyone
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 teaching as per
children
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 ability and understanding
level
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.
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  • peer pressure
  • flexibility
  • instill values
  • socialization
  • communication skills
  • specialized facilities
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