Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is widely believed that
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children
are studying in private
schools
should not have to pay
taxes
to provide assistance to
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education
system. I strongly disagree with
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point of view,as
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believe that
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tax payers
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are
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for creating an educational society.
First
of all,
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tax payers
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are an indispensable part of
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economy because their money helps
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the
government
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environment in society in terms of
education
, health care,transportation,and infrastructure.
for instance
, wealthy families tend to send their
children
to private
schools
it does not make sense if they do not pay
taxes
, there are innumerable
children
who are underprivileged so
taxes
help
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to create safe and
education
environmental, Ultimately
this
helps to form up
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nation.
Furthermore
, it is very much needed to pay some sort of money as
tax
to the authority because it helps
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the
government
to hire more qualified teachers and facilitate
children
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who belong to
middle class
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families.
For
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if a student is
friend
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with a student who is studying in private school
then
he may brag about facilities which his school provide to him so it, may create
biasness
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biases
in between
children
right from their childhood, so
taxes
are must for
goverment
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government
to build up
schools
which should be similar to Private
schools
. In conclusion, everyone
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to pay
tax
as per their income
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you are rich or underprivileged because it helps
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as a whole, in my
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it is
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to
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pay
tax
to
government
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for
betterment
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of
education
despite your
children
are studying in
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sectors.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tax exemption
  • public education
  • private schools
  • collective responsibility
  • societal welfare
  • equitable access
  • financial burden
  • social cohesion
  • tax credits
  • vouchers
  • subsidies
  • state-funded
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • public vs. private sector
  • quality of education
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