The uses of social media, such as Facebook, Twitter, are replacing face-to-face contact in this century. Do you think the advantages of this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Facebook,Twitter which are some instances of social media have made
people
habituated to virtual contact rather than physical contact.I do not believe social networking
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more benefits rather than
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drawbacks. Nowadays,it is hard to find a person without having
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account
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social
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network.From children to adults everyone uses
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least
alteast
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one instance of social media.Teenagers are much attracted to
this
as it helps them in bonding with old friends.They became social popular because
people
can share their thoughts and post topics
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they like.
Besides
people
can give suggestions or comments on others post
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makes
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sit
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of them for hours and
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consequently
wasting precious time and energy
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unimportant things.
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,a recent survey conducted by times reported that most teenagers spend half of their time in social networks.
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,some
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believe that
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of social media is very much beneficial to
people
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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