Very few schoolchildren learn about the value of money and how to look after it, yet this is a critical life skill that should be taught as part of the school curriculum. Do you agree or disagree?

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We are living our lives around with
money
, no one
think
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that it is impossible to learn about
money
without majoring in economics at university. If elementary, junior high and high school students understand the value of
money
in the early stage, things to know before entering society would
be lessen
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. In
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spit
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of that, in my opinion, school education doesn’t need to teach it. One of
reasons
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is that only after starting work do
children
understand how important
money
is.
Money
is always equivalent exchange with something worthwhile. In that case,
this
is your great deal of
labor
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.
However
,
children
still should learn by allocating their own time to develop themselves, rather than doing something for others.
Furthermore
,
children
are protected food shelter and clothing by their parents and
then
they do not really take care of finances.
However
, just because
children
do not need to care about that, doesn’t always mean
money
is irrelevant to them. It’s difficult in that sense of the metaphysical meaning of
money
, they would make sense
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weight of currency.
For instance
, £50 notes are extremely expensive in constraint £1 coins are normal price in a lot of groceries.
Otherwise
, pocket
money
is good practice to manage on a small budget. Keeping their wallet clear is
also
important by being mind to have the exact amount ready. By doing so, they would be able to calculate quicker, and feel studying arithmetic was pretty useful. In conclusion, those things can be enough to be skilled in
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practices. There is no need to make a curriculum.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial literacy
  • curriculum
  • fiscal responsibility
  • money management
  • budgeting
  • saving
  • investing
  • adult population
  • financial decisions
  • educational systems
  • theoretical curriculum
  • practical life skills
  • real-life experience
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