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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspaper or book because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Although
 some
people
 believe reading newspaper or book contents online results in some disadvantages, it seems to me that the availability of newspaper or book contents online can lead to many profits. I feel
this
 way for two reasons electronic hardware
advances
 and
internet
advances
.
To begin
 with, nowadays, electronic and computer hardware
advances
 lead to
people
 are more willing to use electronic education these days.
As a result
 of industrial
advances
, many companies were forced to increase the quality and efficiency of their products;
this
 point
result
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 in small and fast mobile phones and e-book readers.
Consequently
,
people
 can save many pdf files in own devices and carry out and read that any time. So, using electronic devices for reading books or newspapers gain much popularity among
people
.
Last
 but not least, considering many
advances
internet
 grow up many fast, especially in speed parameters. Regarding the
internet
 to raise public awareness of
people
 about the news. So a user can easily find any news or any electrical books on the
internet
 for reading, and every moment these kinds of
sources
 update and share on the
internet
 for public users.
Besides
, from an economic perspective, increasing electrical
sources
 usage
instead
 of paper-based
sources
 not only can lead to saving the environment in safety condition but
also
 can decrease cost for buying physical
sources
. To sum up, in the near future electrical
sources
 place
instead
 of paper-based because of references, electronic hardware
advances
, and
internet
advances
. Because if we use paper-based
sources
 can result in some disadvantages on the environment and
people
 economy.
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