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Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life. Which do you consider to be the major influence?

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The issue of whether an individual personality is dependent on his/
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 characteristics , or is based on their experience has been raising a lot of debates.In my opinion, experience plays a crucial role and can override any
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 personalities.
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 with, everyone is born with some attributes but it does not remain as they grow and does change over time.
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 , a
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 who is born could have his smiles and eats methods similar to his mother but as he grows it changes based on the
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's observations
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 other people around him.
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 development of his character changes with the environment in which he is grown.Another example is , a
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 may be born with a patient attitude merely to his father but over
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time with a number of major failures that he might have experienced , he might lose the patience and could become
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.
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, some personalities
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 as mannerism could remain unchanged.
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 , some individuals have the habit of winking both eyes
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or rubbing their nose.It could be noticed that their father or grandfather or even uncle has
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similar traits.
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, if the
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 had been to a boarding school and other peers made jokes , he would try to stop following those habits. In conclusion, though everyone is born with certain personalities it is not permanent.The world is changing and so do our behaviour and attributes.The more people move around and meet new environments their experience creates
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 impact and their identity as well changes.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nature vs. nurture debate
  • genetic inheritance
  • personality traits
  • behavior patterns
  • heritability
  • twins studies
  • malleable characteristics
  • upbringing
  • environmental influences
  • critical periods
  • language acquisition
  • worldview
  • innate traits
  • personal experiences
  • psychological development
  • epigenetics
  • adaptive behaviors
  • cultural imprinting
  • temperament
  • social conditioning
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