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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world, still go hungry. Why is this the cause? What can be done about this problem?

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Although
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 agricultural facilities and farming methods are improved, many
people
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 still do not have enough
food
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 to eat. Two main reasons are financial
problems
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 and climate
change
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. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss the causes and solutions on
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 topic.
To begin
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 with, many
people
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 think that a lot of
farmers
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 are facing
problems
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 regarding loans and weather
change
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 not only
that
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 government is not helping enough
to
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farmer
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a farmer
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 in case of financial
problems
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,
this
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 directly affects the shortage of
food
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.
Moreover
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, in some cases when
farmers
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 grow crops it destroyed due to heavy rain and bad weather.
For instance
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, in the year 2019, a huge farmer protest was going on against authority to increase the loan, it shows that
farmers
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 are not happy and they are facing big
problems
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 to grow vegetables and all.
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, the mentioned root causes can be resolved by taking a few preventive steps. Well, it's not easy to solve climate
change
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 suddenly but if the government takes few steps to protect the environment it can help to reduce the weather
change
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.
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, higher authorities should increase agriculture loans so
farmers
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 can grow more crops and
food
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,
this
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 will help to provide more
food
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 for
people
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 and no one has to sleep hungry. To recapitulate,
farmers
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 are facing lots of
problems
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 in agriculture and due to
this
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people
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 are not getting enough
food
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, they go hungry.
This
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 problem can only be solved by the government by offering
farmers
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 proper help in agriculture.
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