Do children behave better when they are physically punished or rewarded? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There are those who believe that
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physical
punishments work better for
children
to act nicer.
However
, there are those who find the way of giving
children
things they want for better attitude has
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influence on
children
. Well, I believe that
children
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improves better when they acquire rewards in the process of educating it rather than when they get
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physically
taught with pain.
First
,
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physical
punishment has a significant bad influence
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children
, as their attitudes become more polite, only because they are afraid of getting attacked or maybe
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hurt so not because they
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want to.
Moreover
, no child deserves to be
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attacked even though
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an educational purpose. Unfortunately, in Japan, a considerable number of
children
die because of
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child abuse every year and most of their guardians say that they hit the
children
to teach them some lessons for better
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.
This
example indicates that physical abuse to
children
put them in a situation filled with fear and danger.
Also
, if they had chosen another way of teaching, which is rewarding them, how to act more accurate, the young precious lives would have not been lost.
Second
, I read an article about the most efficient way of
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children
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them through life
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Asahi newspaper a fortnight ago. It informed that,
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according
to a survey by Aichi prefecture,
children
had become less
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and joined more social activities to contribute a society when they had grown up in an environment, where people around them had treated them kindly
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elderly person on a train. The reason behind
this
was that they were able to learn how to be nice and care about others by being done so since they had been quite young. To sum up, for these two reasons; the
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punishment
that its influence in enormously bad and the advantage of rewarding in that
children
learn it by their own experience, I strongly think that
children
learn how to behave better when they get rewards.
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