Some people believe that too many resources and attention are devoted to the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
In recent years, governments and non-governmental organizations have spent a good amount of money in protecting wild
animals
. Some people
may argue that too many resources
have been devoted to the protection of wildlives
. Correct your spelling
wildlife
wildfires
However
, I would argue that it is far from enough in terms of the resources
and effort that people
have devoted to wildlife protection.
It is true that a
increasing number of funding and Change the article
an
resources
have been invested in protecting wild animals
and birds. For example
, governments in a number of countries have spent money in building wildlife preserve spaces, which aim at protecting the habitat of endangered species. Apart from authorities, there are multiple non-government organizations and individuals who have contributed resources
and effort to save wild animals
.In the United States, for instance
, a number of wild animal hospitals that rescue lives in the wilderness are funded by private companies or charity groups. The resources
that devoted have saved millions of lives.
Although
people
have put so much effort in
saving wild Change preposition
into
animals
, there are still many wild animals
that are in danger. Some endangered species may disappear in the near future. I strongly believe that it is the responsibility of human to save the species that are in danger of extinction and preserve the diversity of earth
. There are a lot of measures that can be taken to save endangered Add an article
the earth
animals
and to improve their living condition. For example
, polar bears are facing the difficulties of food shortage Change the form of the verb
caused
cause
by Correct your spelling
caused
the
climate change. I think more attention should be devoted to Correct article usage
apply
protect
wild Change the verb form
protecting
animals
like polar bears.
To conclude, it is true that people
have devoted a lot of fundings to protect wildlife, yet there are still many endangered animals
, and people
need to contribute more resources
to save themSubmitted by dandelionsmy on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite