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Some people think it is more important to plant more tree in open areas in towns and cities than provide more housing. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Many
people
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 believe that more
trees
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 should be planted in the urban areas rather than making buildings. I am in agreement with
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 view that planting
trees
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 are more important than houses.
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 essay will discuss it in the forthcoming paragraphs.
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 with, to live healthy life plants are necessary for
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human being. Plants inhale carbon dioxide and exhale oxygen. There are many advantages of greenery. The human can take fresh purify air. On hot days,
people
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 can enjoy the shade of
trees
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. Having
wooded
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 area can reduce noise pollution in a metropolitan area.
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, I live in Ludhiana, It is the noisiest city in Punjab. Where I live, there are many parks and having a number of
trees
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 which reduces noise pollution. Actually,
trees
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 make balance with the ecosystem.
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,
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adequate building is
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 necessary for the citizens. Somehow, it will affect the environment
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 as building will construct by cutting the
trees
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. It will imbalance the ecosystem as rainfall will disturb, the temperature will rise and so on.
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 , if there will be less building the rent will increase and homeless
people
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 will commit a crime.
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, building home in rural areas will
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 increase the expenses of transportation. It will difficult for
people
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 to commute long distance on daily basis.
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, It will
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 reduce the productivity of employees. To conclude, In my opinion, planting
trees
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 in urban areas are most important to balance the ecosystem.
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, there will
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 be a negative effect.
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