IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 2.5

Some people are of the opinion that being highly qualified is the only way to ensure a well-paying job. While others believe that having work experience is the best way to get a well-paying job. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #job #work
Most
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
people believe that having
university
Add an article
a university
show examples
 degree is the best way to enter into high profile jobs, while
other
Correct pronoun usage
others
show examples
 think
its
Replace the word
it's
it is
show examples
 better to have experience and skill set. I aim to examine both sides of
arguments
Correct article usage
the arguments
show examples
 and present my personal view. Many mankind
ponder
Change the verb form
ponders
show examples
 that it is easier to get good jobs if they are university graduates. Having advanced education put people one step ahead.
This
 can be the factor of getting a better job where
other
Correct pronoun usage
others
show examples
 may not get the chance for it. Every year 1,000 plus students are getting graduated,
this
show
Change the verb form
shows
show examples
 how critical the level of education is rising.
Ex – Teacher
Add a hyphen
Ex-Teacher
show examples
, Medicine, law, Engineer, need
educational
Add an article
the educational
show examples
 background to acquire
this
 post.
On the other hand
, having expertise in the field can balance
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the applicant. For many
positions
Add a comma
,positions
show examples
 there are
overwhelming
Correct article usage
an overwhelming
show examples
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
number of applicants. It is often seen having relevant experience in that stream can add value
toward
Change preposition
to
show examples
 the organization &
also
 will be able to apply for that position.
For
Change preposition
apply
show examples
Ex – Marketing jobs need highly skilled staff for achieving their targets. In Conclusion For getting a good
opportunity
Add a comma
,opportunity
show examples
 it requires a relevant background either in work experience or education depends on the requirement. People should ensure they are having relevant skillset or qualification before applying for a job.
Submitted by sweety.moni007 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Highly qualified
  • Well-paying job
  • Securing
  • Knowledge
  • Expertise
  • Higher positions
  • Higher salaries
  • Practical skills
  • Real-world setting
  • Employers value
  • Professional connections
  • Ideal
  • Industry
  • Job role
  • Opinion
  • Experience
What to do next:
Look at other essays: