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Some people think that the government should spend more money on public services rather than wasting money on the arts. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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there is no doubt
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 plays a crucial part in our life .while some people argue that administration should invest more in social services
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 of on skills .
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, I contradict the statement
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 the
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 no need to spend capital on the arts .I will discuss in subsequent paragraphs
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 with , the authority has to spend funds on skills
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 as music ,dance and painting etc because those people who have poverty in their lives ,
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, they can not able to show their latent and confidence have been losing by them .
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 ,there are many ways to investing
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such
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 as,free conditions that can be organised by the
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. in
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 ,way everyone can take part in
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 without any interruption .
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, many individuals get pleasure in going to see music and theatre performances so it is important that can continue to provide entertainment to the public
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,
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 does not mean that the social services neglected and
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, there are several reasons for spending the amount of the
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 budget on it .
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 and foremost ,social services are things
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 as a hospital.roads and school and these things determined the quality of life most of us will have .
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 if the
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 does not spend cash on hospitals ,the health of our society may decline .
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,if not enough
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 is spent on schools,our children may not be properly educated .
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 ,it will be the poor in our society that will affect more if do not spend
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 on these things In the conclusion , the
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 should invest an amount of
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 in both either social service or artcraft and so
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 think spendings on
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 is not a waste .
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 will help individuals a lot.
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