More and more people are buying fashionable clothes these days. Does it have more negative or positive effects? Give reasons.

Fashion
plays a major role in
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contemporary
contemparary
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world. There is an increasing trend in people spending more money on clothing. The notion
further
proved when analyzed the incremental growth of the world's
fashion
industry over the
last
decade. In my opinion, the said trend has both good and adverse implications. The
outter
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outer
appearance plays a key role in
personality
development,
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most of the big organizations are conducting separate personal grooming sessions
to
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their newly recruited employees because employers have now identified the true value of it for
the
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personality
development. The right
dresscode
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dress code
is a crucial tool in
business
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world where it would help a
person
to create a good
first
impression.
On the contrary
, too much spending on
fashion
could lead a
person
towards
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financial position.
moreover
, higher concern on
outter
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outer
apperarance
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appearance
would trap a
person
on a
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obsession to
immitate
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imitate
others especially the
celebreties
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celebrities
.
This
could lead to a situation where one would not attain
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by any means. The worst part is that some people
are often end
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up with unsuitable
fashion
to them that would destroy their
personality
. In conclusion, people spending on
fashion
is a positive trend, yet, one should understand their limits in relation to the spending capacity.
This
balanced approach will help a
person
to be a pleasing
personality
.
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