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Some people think that educated people are more valuable than people who have learned skills through experience. Do you think that educated people are the most valuable for society? What kinds of skills can people learn trough experience that can benefit society?

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The misunderstanding which comes from ancient times, that people who get high
education
 are more precious and helpful for humanity than people who educated through
experience
, is not actual today. In my opinion, each
person
 is costly to
society
 regardless of being educated or not. It is obvious, that to seed and cultivates plants is a skill which gets through practice is essentially important for
society
. I suppose that we should not appreciate a
person
 in the context of his or her being educated or not educated. A
person
 who does not have an
education
 can make incredible result using his skills which have got during the
experience
.
Therefore
,
education
 develops a worldview and gives chance to develop your knowledge, and how you will use it for
society
 it will determine your position there.
For example
, I read in the newspaper that a homeless daily cleans London some main streets without any expectations. Gardening is one of many examples which shows that ability can get through the
experience
. A
person
 who is used to planting and care about plants for many years is irreplaceable even if being uneducated.
Moreover
, the
experience
 has taught him a lot about that sphere and the value that he makes for
society
 is tremendous. As a matter of fact, Dubai has been created a club which is consisted of gardeners who do not have any
education
 in that aspect but are the best masters in their field.
Accordingly
, to be educated does not mean being more valuable for
society
. Many skills are adopted during time and
experience
. It is more significant how you will use your practice or knowledge to make
benefit
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