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People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #customs #traditions
Some
people
 may say that we should not be dividing the strengths and weaknesses to any genders because we are all
people
 and we have so much more differences than genders. There are a lot of factors,
for
example
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 childhood, place of residence,
profession
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 which makes a human the way he is. I definitely agree with
this
 point of view, but I
also
 cannot close my eyes
on
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 small details
such
 as genetic predisposition, which makes men more aggressive and physically stronger than women, and women more sensitive and thoughtful than men. But I am glad that we live in
time
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 where all
this
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 stereotypes on the way to be dispelled and excluding
people
 from work according to their gender is almost not a problem. I live in a modern developing and relatively young country, so we are more liberal (I like to think so), and I haven’t faced or heard about a situation when a good worker was fired or wasn’t hired because he or she did not fit into the gender frames, because seeing a fragile lady on the top of the military division or a big strong guy as a nail master is no longer something unacceptable, as it should be. I want to make a friendly reminder that the thing is, it is not the gender
who
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 defines who we are, but the large set of human qualities and a life experience. And making
people
 leave their beloved workplaces or leave the idea of
a
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success in any sphere is totally unfair and inhumanely.
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