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ALL CHILDREN SHOULD BE MADE TO WEAR SCHOOL UNIFORM. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE.

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School is the place to gain education, knowledge and character. Nowadays, most of the institution has implemented dress code for both the
children
 and the teacher. I totally agree that wearing a uniform for school has some advantage like safety
although
 it has few cons
such
 as uncomfortable for
children
. In the essay, I will discuss from my viewpoint Having a dress code for the institution is a good thing.
For example
,
children
 coming from the higher economic background can wear costly attire while the kids in the lower economic background cannot afford
this
 and that will cause inferiority among them. So having the same apparel makes them equal and it brings a more healthy society.
On the other hand
, wearing the same attire every day makes them uncomfortable due to certain weather conditions.
For example
, wearing a skirt on winter days makes discomfort for the
children
.
Also
, it makes them boring on special occasions like birthdays.
However
, the school can implement different attires based on the weather conditions. To conclude, wearing a uniform has more advantages than disadvantages. I agree that the institution should implement the same attire for the student to get a healthy generation.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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