Consider the events leading up to the French Revolution, the Revolution itself, and its aftermath, particularly from the perspective of the characters. Is the French Revolution is justified?

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History is a discipline that builds up eventually the
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world. From the prehistoric periods to the 21st century, innumerable significant events had contributed to the forming of the present humankind. Among them, the French
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is undeniably an
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that influenced deeply the 18th century's society and its consequences are still remarkable
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these days. In my opinion, since every
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have their own triggering causes, the French
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is predominantly justified. On the one hand, under the dogmatic reign of the ancient regime, people coming from lower social classes started to, little by little, express their
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in order to abolish the
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system. The accomplishment of
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is
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in terms of the moral and mental transformation of the community at the time. In the long term, social structures would
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be modified for the better by complying with the principles of justice and equality. On the other side, the proceeding of the
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itself has acted as a stepping stone for other underprivileged populations to step up and claim for their self-determination's right which, in
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day and age, is the fundamental of every constitution.
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the human and material losses that the
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swept along are far beyond the imaginable, one should
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take into account that there is no success without sacrifices and the French
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is
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a model example. As for the aftermath, the revolt of 1789 has revolutionized not only the french legal system but
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that of many other nations.
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, the Declaration of the Rights of Man and of the Citizen proclaiming liberty, equality, the inviolability of property, and the right to resist oppression was established for the
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time. All things considered, despite the considerably heavy price that french citizens had to pay, the French
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had not
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its people's will. Largely bestowed to construct new political and legal systems that react in
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of equity, the French
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has been an archetype of
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modern values.
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