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Some cities have vehicle-free days when private cars, trucks and motorcycles are banned from the city center. People are encouraged to use public transportation such as buses, taxis and metro on vehicle-free days. To what extent do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent times, the need to encourage
people
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 to
use
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 public
transport
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 is an issue all over the world.
Currently
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 some cities are
banne
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banned
banning
privet
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private
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vehicales
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vehicles
vehicle
 for a day due to air pollution and they are trying to force
public
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the public
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 to
use
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trunsport
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transport
.
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, there are some drawbacks to
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,
such
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 as public
transport
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 is
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overloaded
, there are
some
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also
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 many advantages
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 example,
people
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 may realize the
advateage
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advantage
advantages
 of public
transport
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.
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 with, there are several negative aspects to
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banned
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private
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 transports from the CBD, which the city may
experince
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experience
.
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, since
people
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 have to
use
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transport
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thoese
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these
those
days
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 and usually work starts at 8 am for office-workers, the
publictransport
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public transport
 could be
overcroweded
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overcrowded
 that
days
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.
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, vehicle-free
days
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 could give a hard time for elderly
people
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, as they may do not have a physical condition to
use
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pudlic
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public
transport
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, which could
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effect
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 them in a negative way. Despite these reasons, there are a number of advantages to
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this
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this day
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days
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, which the society may benefit from.
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 of all, some
people
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 may realise the benefit of public
transport
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 and they may decide to
use
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 it after all, which could reduce traffic-jam and air pollution.
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, if more
people
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 decide to go
with
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 train, bus or subway. It could increase the profit of the government which could spend on
developig
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developing
 public
transport
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 for
istance
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instance
, building new rail lines. In
conslusion
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conclusion
, even though the
diadvantages
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disadvantages
 is
soamthing
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something
 to be concerned about, they are short-term issues, as compare to the long benefits the advantage offer.
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, it is
in
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my opinion that vehicle-free
days
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 could have a good impact
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 our society.
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