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Many people find it hard to balance their work with other parts of their lives. What are the reasons for this? How this problem can be overcome?

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Balancing
work
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your work
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life
 with your personal
life
 is not always easy. Many people struggle a lot to achieve a balance.
However
, an equilibrium
in
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is much needed to let the boat sail smoothly.
This
 essay is going to discuss why is it difficult to maintain a
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balanced
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balance
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balanced
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work
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between work
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 and other parts of
life
, and the solution to the issues. Working a
full
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full-time
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time
 job is exhausting ,
also
 quite consuming as it takes most part of your day. A person who reaches home in the evening is already dead tired to perform other tasks.
For instance
, cooking, cleaning, and if there are kids taking care of them can be a hassle. In
this
 scenario, a person should prepare way ahead of their week to be able to manage the tasks. Cooking and cleaning can be done on the weekend to save
time
in
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 the weekdays. For the kids, a nanny or caregiver can be hired for a couple of hours to take out
time
 for yourself.
On the other hand
, social
life
 is
also
 called affected by working 9 to 5. Being socially active is important for one's physical and mental health. sometimes work can get too demanding . Meetings, conferences can exceed your working hours leaving no
time
 to meet your friends or party.
However
, one should understand that it is not always necessary to go to lavish dinners or extravagant parties. One can always go on a casual meetup
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relief
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 their kya mind of the pressure followed by working full
time
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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