Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?

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children
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numerous
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their
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to play
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essay discusses the merits and demerits of
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having a more number of
toys
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for a
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. on the one hand,some fathers and mothers buy
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number of
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for their
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.
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is seen in
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because they express their love towards their
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by gifting more
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toys
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.
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,
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child
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the child
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can have fun and joy by playing with
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.
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,it makes the kid
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play
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without
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dependent on any other
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,and
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by playing with some
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like remote cars ,makes the
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to
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enhance his mental abilities.Most of the
children
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are stressed
becuase
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because
of the schools,so after coming to the home,spending time with
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makes them stress relief.Nowadays,as obesity is seen in
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also
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,few
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buy
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bicycle as a toy ,so that
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can
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loose
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calories.
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,By gifting
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to
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child
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a child
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can lead to some demerits as well.some
children
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play
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amount of time with their
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which is not good for their studies.By playing with
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children
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neglect outdoor sports which
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bad for their health. By playing with
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continiously
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continuously
,
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child
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the child
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looses
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the chance of interacting with
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another child
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child
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,so
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child
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communication skills will be declined.To illustrate,In times Magzine it is reported that
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who play with
toys
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continiously
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continuously
,show poor speaking skills.
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,By having
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numerous
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,
child
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do
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not know the value of money.Few
parents
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buy
toys
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for their
child
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inorder
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in order
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to not make noise and
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makes the
child
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to
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take advantage of it,which is not good for their
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run. To conclude,Having
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numerous
toys
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with the
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is very useful ,but at the same
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demerits should not be underestimated.
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