Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?

children
get
a
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numerous
toys
by
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their
parents
to play
.
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with.
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This
essay discusses the merits and demerits of
of
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having a more number of
toys
for a
child
. on the one hand,some fathers and mothers buy
excess
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an excess
the excess
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number of
toys
for their
child
.
This
is seen in
parents
because they express their love towards their
child
by gifting more
number of
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toys
.
As a result
,
child
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can have fun and joy by playing with
toys
.
Moreover
,it makes the kid
to
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play
with out
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without
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dependent on any other
child
,and
also
by playing with some
toys
like remote cars ,makes the
child
to
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enhance his mental abilities.Most of the
children
are stressed
becuase
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because
of the schools,so after coming to the home,spending time with
toys
makes them stress relief.Nowadays,as obesity is seen in
children
also
,few
parents
buy
small
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bicycle as a toy ,so that
child
can
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loose
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calories.
on the other hand
,By gifting
toys
to
child
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a child
the child
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can lead to some demerits as well.some
children
play
large
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amount of time with their
toys
which is not good for their studies.By playing with
toys
children
neglect outdoor sports which
is
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bad for their health. By playing with
toys
continiously
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continuously
,
child
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the child
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looses
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the chance of interacting with
other
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another child
other children
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child
,so
as a result
child
communication skills will be declined.To illustrate,In times Magzine it is reported that
children
who play with
toys
continiously
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continuously
,show poor speaking skills.
In addition
,By having
a
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numerous
toys
,
child
do
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not know the value of money.Few
parents
buy
toys
for their
child
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in order
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inorder
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in order
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to not make noise and
this
makes the
child
to
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take advantage of it,which is not good for their
longer
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run. To conclude,Having
a
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numerous
toys
with the
child
is very useful ,but at the same
time
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demerits should not be underestimated.
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