IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6

In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

#countries #schools #student #behaviour
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
In several countries, students behaviour have been a problem inside the
school
Use synonyms
 facilities.
This
Linking Words
 dilemma could be a product of wrong ways for parental eduction but most the
time
Use synonyms
 it is caused by divorced
parents
Use synonyms
, well
however
Linking Words
 spending more
time
Use synonyms
 with their children will help them . ,
,
Change the punctuation
apply
show examples
Linking Words
furthermore
Add a comma
,furthermore
show examples
 one of the challenging situations a
child
Use synonyms
 could go through is divorced
parents
Use synonyms
 .
this
Linking Words
 results that the
parents
Use synonyms
 live far from each other .
This
Linking Words
 obstacle makes the
child
Use synonyms
's personality unstable , results in a plunge in his social and
school
Use synonyms
life
Use synonyms
 , which is the number one reason for students bad behaviour in
school
Use synonyms
.
however
Linking Words
 , every problem has a solution. so, in a parental divorce situation spending more
time
Use synonyms
 and following up with the
child
Use synonyms
 from both side
parents
Use synonyms
 will help stabilize the
child
Use synonyms
's personality and social
life
Use synonyms
 which consists of
school
Use synonyms
life
Use synonyms
 and behaviour , a recent study proved that a
child
Use synonyms
 that visits his divorced
parents
Use synonyms
 equally throughout the week get better grades as
in contrast
Linking Words
 of the
child
Use synonyms
 who infrequently visits his
parents
Use synonyms
 . in conclusion , the most considerable complication a
child
Use synonyms
 could face is his
parents
Use synonyms
 getting a divorce
this
Linking Words
 severes in many problems throughout his
life
Use synonyms
 and a solution for
this
Linking Words
 is the caring that gets from his
parents
Use synonyms
, the more the better .
Parents
Use synonyms
 should make him feel that they are not away from him and that they are here to help him and stand by his side with parental education ,
time
Use synonyms
 ,caring and energy ,
Submitted by amerraed88 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: