There is an increasing number of anti-social behaviours in recent years; people generally believe that society is to blame. What do you think the causes are and who is responsible for this?

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of behaving disorderly by human beings has been increasing immensely .whereas,some
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society for the lawless behaviour of individuals. In
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will put forward some causes as well as practical
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issue.
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must have to treat every person equally,whoever
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breaks the law because sometimes officers
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high positions or government servants does illegal
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but never get caught as well as do not pay any
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. There are inequalities existing in
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legal system.
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rate of unemployment is the main cause of crime.
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commit illegal
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to earn money especially when they are capable to get
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job but get replaced with someone who
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high contacts with
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or a good reference There are some solutions to tackle
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situation . To start with, family plays an imperative role in
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life. Having
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good relations with family members as well as less
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violent
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situations
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gives so much of
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world.
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government should impose stringent rules
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all law offenders equally, especially , increase employment opportunities for young
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so that they will not choose
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paths to earn money. In
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conclusion
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behave disorderly due to unemployment and corruption legal system which can only be solved by applying
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equally as well as by
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providing
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to educated
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