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Some people believe that visual images provide enough evidence that a crime is committed.Others think that they are not enough their own and other evidence is needed.Discuss bothebthe views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, crimes are increasing at an alarming rate. It is a debatable issue that which kind of proof should
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evidence
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.Some
peole
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people
 believe that visual
evidence
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 like images and videos is
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sufficient proof to decide whether the
crime
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 is committed or not.While others believe that more supporting
evidences
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evidence
pieces of evidence
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 are needed for the same.
This
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 essay is set to discuss both the views along with my opinion. In
this
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 21st century,
morden
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modern
 technology has made human life easier. It is a common practice to install the video recording camera at many places like malls,workplaces,banks,theatres etc which helps to spot unwanted activities like robbery,
murdes
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murders
murder
. These pictures and videos
plays
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 a major role in solving
crime
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.
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, it is not possible always to find a human witness at a
crime
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 spot. At that time, video recording helps the cops to reach
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thieves.
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, technology
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can be helpful at the same time
one
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 can use it as a weapon. There
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 numerous application available at fingertips that could be used to edit the image or video. It is easy to alter
evidences
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evidence
pieces of evidence
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 using these tools.
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,
one
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 celebrity had taken a picture of herself in bed condition saying that
one
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 of the male costars had abused her physically. After
investigations
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 it was proven that she
falsed
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falsely
alleged
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 male costar. I believe that
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 only visual images should not be
cosider
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considered
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proof,
one
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 should absolutely look for other
evidence
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. To sum up,it can be concluded that pictures and videos are an inevitable piece of
evidence
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 but not the ultimate
evidence
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 that can decide if the
crime
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is happened
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 or not.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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