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Many people believe that countries should produce food for the whole population and import as little food as possible. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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 contemporary world, it is irrefutable that agriculture is the backbone of each
country
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. A large section of the society
argue
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 that nations should focus on producing
food
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 for their populations and try to import very little, and only if
it
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 quite essential. I strongly agree with the aforementioned notion and the
upcomming
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upcoming
 paragraphs will shed light on
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 in details. To commence with, one of the pivotal reasons to generate all edibles needed for all citizens is
economical
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the economical
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 stability of that
country
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. If a nation
produce
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 all eatables by own, It will not depend on other nations to purchase
that
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 would result in
prosperity
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the prosperity
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 of that
country
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.
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, a recent survey conducted by BBC News has revealed that China became the
second
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 prosperous economy in the world due to
ability
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its ability
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of producing
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the
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grains for
whole
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the whole
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 nation.
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, when countries
imports
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food
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 from other nations, they become dependent and sometimes suffer in case of
shortage
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a shortage
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 of
the
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supplies.
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, It is candid that
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self-sufficiency of
food
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 item production for all inhabitants stabilizes that
country
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 economically. The other prime reason for supporting
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 idea is the
quality
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 of
food
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.
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, native foods are generally fresh and of high
quality
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.
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, being produced locally,
food
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 items do not need any chemical to preserve
it
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them
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 for a longer period.
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, the
food
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 items which are imported to other states are mixed with some sort of chemicals to preserve
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them
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 for a couple of days.
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, the edibles cultivated locally are of high
quality
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. In conclusion,
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 essay discussed that the
quality
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 of
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food
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the food
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 which are produced locally is high and brings economical
statbility
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stability
 as well. I believe that every nation should cultivate
food
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 for their population and try to avoid importing edibles as much as possible.
Submitted by Chandan Kumar Singh on

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