You recently started commuting to work by bicycle and discovered that there is a problem with bicycle parking near the building where you work. Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter, •explain the reason for using a bicycle to commute •mention what problems you have encountered with parking •what you recommend to solve the problems

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Dear sir, I am inscribing

this

missive to request you to arrange parking space for the cycle, as I have recently started using the

bicycle

to commute to work. Recently, I have started using a

bicycle

to travel to the

office

because of the traffic.

Moreover

, my accommodation is at a 20-minute distance by cycle, so I save money on fuel costs. I prefer the

bicycle

because it improves my health. As our

office

is in the hub of the city,

that is

why it is very hard to find a spot to park my

bicycle

. I

have

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parked my bike in front of the

office

under the shade of a tree but when I came in the evening it was on the ground and people were having difficulty

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walking on the footpath. It would be really helpful to install the

bicycle

stand in front of the

office

as there is some space under the tree.

Apart from

this

, it will save my two pedals from getting robbed,

along with

providing a secure space for parking without becoming a disturbance in the way of pedestrians. I hope you will acknowledge the issue raised by me as soon as possible. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Simranjot Kaur

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coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single clear idea to improve clarity.

task achievement

Try to provide more detailed recommendations to reinforce the task response.

coherence cohesion

The letter includes a clear greeting and closing.

task achievement

The tone of the letter is polite and formal, which is appropriate for addressing a building manager.

task achievement

The letter effectively explains the reasons for using a bicycle and the parking issue experienced.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

211 words

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