You recently started commuting to work by bicycle and discovered that there is a problem with bicycle parking near the building where you work. Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter, •explain the reason for using a  bicycle to commute •mention what problems you have encountered with parking •what you recommend to solve the problems

Dear sir, I am inscribing
this
missive to request you to arrange parking space for the cycle, as I have recently started using the
bicycle
to commute to work. Recently, I have started using a
bicycle
to travel to the
office
because of the traffic.
Moreover
, my accommodation is at a 20-minute distance by cycle, so I save money on fuel costs. I prefer the
bicycle
because it improves my health. As our
office
is in the hub of the city,
that is
why it is very hard to find a spot to park my
bicycle
. I
have
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parked my bike in front of the
office
under the shade of a tree but when I came in the evening it was on the ground and people were having difficulty
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walking on the footpath. It would be really helpful to install the
bicycle
stand in front of the
office
as there is some space under the tree.
Apart from
this
, it will save my two pedals from getting robbed,
along with
providing a secure space for parking without becoming a disturbance in the way of pedestrians. I hope you will acknowledge the issue raised by me as soon as possible. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Simranjot Kaur
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single clear idea to improve clarity.
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Try to provide more detailed recommendations to reinforce the task response.
coherence cohesion
The letter includes a clear greeting and closing.
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The tone of the letter is polite and formal, which is appropriate for addressing a building manager.
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The letter effectively explains the reasons for using a bicycle and the parking issue experienced.

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